My birthday为题目的作文

My birthdayYesterday was my birthday. I invited my good friends to my home. they buyed me many nice re the party. I open all the presents one by give me some are all liked by me. Of them, I like the book best. Because it is written in English,I can pratice my r seeing the presents ,We have an interesting party, We danced and played some games .I feel we all enjoy ourselves and this is the best party that I hold.

1.“they buyed me many nice re the party. I open …”此句中句首字母要大写，“buyed”应改为“bought”，“open”应改为“opened”.注意时态及词形变化规则。

2.“They give me some surprise.”因叙述过去的事，应为一般过去时，故“give”应改为“gave”。

3.单词“pratice”应改为“practice” 。

4.“We have an interesting party, We danced and played some games .I feel we all enjoy ourselves and this is the best party that I hold.”应该使用一般过去时，所以“have”应改为“had”,“feel”应改为“felt”,“enjoy ”应改为“enjoyed”“is ”应改为“was”,“that I hold”定语从句时态为过去完成时较好，故”“old”应改为“had held”。

本文语句连贯，句意通顺。内容具体。但存在单词，标点和语法错误。

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